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Shattered

speshalmon: Number of posts : 19
Age : 30
Humor : Drastically dark and witty
Registration date : 2010-11-20

Post n°1

Shattered

speshalmon February 11th 2011, 10:27 pm

Standing at the cracked broken mirror
Staring at herself
Knowing she is right
'Women are better than men.'
"ANYTHING you can do I can do better!"
'Men, what do they know about anything? All they ever do is drink and hurt people.'
Standing at the cracked broken mirror crying,
she sees herself as whole.

Alicia Carman

Alicia Carman: Number of posts : 35
Age : 31
Location : singin' in the rain
Registration date : 2009-10-06

Post n°2

Re: Shattered

Alicia Carman February 11th 2011, 10:35 pm

Are the lines in one quotation mark 'like this' supposed to be her thoughts? And the ones in "double" are what she's actually saying? That's kind of what I got from it.

speshalmon

speshalmon: Number of posts : 19
Age : 30
Humor : Drastically dark and witty
Registration date : 2010-11-20

Post n°3

Re: Shattered

speshalmon February 11th 2011, 10:47 pm

Exactly! I was worried people wouldn't get that.

Alicia Carman

Alicia Carman: Number of posts : 35
Age : 31
Location : singin' in the rain
Registration date : 2009-10-06

Post n°4

Re: Shattered

Alicia Carman February 11th 2011, 11:12 pm

I like how your poetry leaves room for different ideas about it. As in,
Did she break the mirror herself?
Or was it him?
...Or is the mirror even broken at all; maybe that's just her insecurity, like playing off of how when people are ugly they break mirrors, and that's how she sees herself
...or MAYBE there's not a mirror at all and it's just symbolic of how broken her life is...

Love it!