After listening, watching, observing,
I'm still not sure
I thought I was at first.
Then I learned more
Do I really want this?
Or am I just blind?
My thoughts seem to hate me.
My heart's in a bind.
It's different from what I'm used to.
It's a strange compromise.
How'd I get in this?
Were my actions not wise?
Can someone please help me?
I need a real talk.
convince me to get out,
before I take the walk
After listening, watching, observing,
I've still not decided
Maybe it'll change.
This story's double-sided.
I'm not sure if this would be considered poetry I just put it in here thinking it probably was. I was just writing my thoughts on something that has recently come up. please tell me how it sounds if you can understand it. I'm no poet, this is the first "poem" I've written, (Mrs. Stockdale assignments don't count) so give me any suggestions to improve my writing. Especially the last "stanza" seems a little awkward to me.
I'm still not sure
I thought I was at first.
Then I learned more
Do I really want this?
Or am I just blind?
My thoughts seem to hate me.
My heart's in a bind.
It's different from what I'm used to.
It's a strange compromise.
How'd I get in this?
Were my actions not wise?
Can someone please help me?
I need a real talk.
convince me to get out,
before I take the walk
After listening, watching, observing,
I've still not decided
Maybe it'll change.
This story's double-sided.
I'm not sure if this would be considered poetry I just put it in here thinking it probably was. I was just writing my thoughts on something that has recently come up. please tell me how it sounds if you can understand it. I'm no poet, this is the first "poem" I've written, (Mrs. Stockdale assignments don't count) so give me any suggestions to improve my writing. Especially the last "stanza" seems a little awkward to me.
October 28th 2011, 10:18 pm by speshalmon
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