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    The Wilting Rose

    i<3edwardcullen
    i<3edwardcullen


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    Post  i<3edwardcullen August 31st 2009, 12:06 am

    To feel the wind on your face.
    To feel the caress of a breeze.
    A caress of a lover once here.
    But then, not to feel.
    Not to feel the petals of a rose.
    Not to feel the pain of one lost.
    Not to feel a single tear.
    Feel it roll down your cheek…
    In this state you can wait,
    Forever at the most.
    With your dull eyes that stare
    Blankly ahead into the fog,
    Unfeeling of the ghostly tendrils
    That caress your being,
    That try and stay your slumber
    And drown you into nothingness.
    drasticDreamer
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    Post  drasticDreamer August 31st 2009, 4:01 pm

    *tear* It's tragic, Nifer.
    I'm an illusion
    I'm an illusion


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    Post  I'm an illusion September 1st 2009, 7:01 pm

    Aw, Jen Jen!!! This one is sad. Very strong imagery, though.

    I like the Journey poem, too. It has a very strong ending.
    i<3edwardcullen
    i<3edwardcullen


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    Post  i<3edwardcullen September 7th 2009, 9:07 am

    It doesn't say it'll be ok.
    It doesn't give off a musky scent.
    It doesn't gently wipe away my tears.
    It can't wrap its arms around me.
    It can't hold me tight or give me security.
    And if it can't do all of that,
    Then why do I still cry
    To a pillow?
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    Post  President September 8th 2009, 5:22 pm

    Cuz pillows are soft and squishy?

    Aw Jen... ='( Sad
    I'm an illusion
    I'm an illusion


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    Post  I'm an illusion September 13th 2009, 9:00 pm

    Aw, Jen!!! I really like this poem...it's sweet and infinitely sad and at the same time adorable!!!! It was definitely smart to leave the fact that it was a pillow till the end.

    Good job. Smile
    i<3edwardcullen
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    Post  i<3edwardcullen September 23rd 2009, 2:57 am

    Oh gravity! Thou art a heartless bitch.
    Mine eyes doth close in your heaviest wake
    Perchance, I ne'er possessed a hope in hell
    That I would survive this most dreadful day.

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