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    Cross my heart and hope to die.

    AStarryWonder
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    AStarryWonder


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    Cross my heart and hope to die. Empty Cross my heart and hope to die.

    Post  AStarryWonder November 21st 2009, 10:52 pm

    The Soundless

    Hatred finds a star
    Feathers fall from a sky
    Thoughts flood a crown
    Three times to stop
    Three times to dust
    Three times they walked upon this earth
    A standing in fire's heart
    A candle kindles nevermore
    A voice disappears into the night
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    I'm an illusion
    I'm an illusion
    I'm an illusion


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    Cross my heart and hope to die. Empty Re: Cross my heart and hope to die.

    Post  I'm an illusion December 27th 2009, 4:25 pm

    Well, I can't say I get it. Smile But I hardly ever do.

    I like the parallelism of 'three times' in the middle lines. Smile They're very nice, Huy. You also used parallelism in the last three lines, beginning each with 'a', which sort've unified the poem. Very nice.

    (still don't get it...although the first two lines call up a clear image of hunting in my mind...)
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